In a whole beneath the ground there lived a lot of ants. They were building a new home because a rain had drowned the other one. One of the ants was building a small house. Another one was building a medium-size home. But everyone paid attention to the big home that Little Red Ant was building. It was really big. So came Black Ant and asked Red why she was building such a big house.
“What’s wrong with that?” Said little Red Ant. “It makes room for new people,” she said as she continued building her big home.
Suddenly, there was a big cracking and a horrible loud sound. It was the Ant Eater!! Everyone started to run in all directions as the ant eater rushed into the first house, the small one. Luckily, the ants in that house had already run away. The same happened with the second house, the medium one. All the ants were panicking! It was then when they heard Red Ant’s voice shouting:
“Come along everyone, there is room for all of us”
So after a little while of not being able to reach the big Red Ant house, the Ant Eater started to feel frustrated, made a weird noise and left. All the ants were so happy! They had survived an Ant Eater attack! And all because Red Ant had the vision of making a big house! They were all so happy and grateful that they organized a feast. And the days went by with all the ants living in the big house that had saved their lives.
The end
Written by Paula, Macarena, Gisela and Agustina.
Note: it's not that I'm a fast typer, I already had it typed on my netbook :P
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ReplyDeleteA truce
ReplyDeleteIt was a rainy summer day in Ituzaingo when a group of little Red Ants where forced to leave their home as theirs had been flooded by the storm.
As soon as the panic was gone, they got organized and decided to get into a house. But it was already occupied by a crowded family of cockroaches! "Let's besiege the house and push them away!", said the queen. But one of the oldest workers explained that it was a difficult task. So the queen proposed to have a word with the leader of the cockroaches. The meeting took place under the kitchen. No sooner the conversation was becoming spicy than one cockroach suggested sharing the place. Both ants and cockroaches bursted into rage. And then a soft tiny voice was heard. "What's wrong with that?", said little Red Ant. "It makes room for room people".
After a dead silence, the queen of the ants and the leader of the cockroaches made a route map of the house and decided which zone was for each group. Eventually, both leaders shook hands and they all lived together peacefully...at least, for the time being.
Written by Mariela Barletta, Andrés Lema, Marcelo Mediavilla y María Cecilia Morilla.
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ReplyDeleteCeci has some troubles with the options of the blog so she can only upload things as comments. I already uploaded the story as a new publication.
ReplyDeleteGreat story girls!! we both wrote about the home of the ants being destroyed hahaha coincidence!
Thanks Mariela! I´ll try for the tenth time during the weekend haha! The orange pencil does not want to appear with me...
ReplyDeleteNice Happy ending!
ReplyDeleteExcellent story!! As regards the linguistic mistakes, in my opinion, in the first paragraph: "One of the ants was building a small house. Another one was building a medium-size home. But everyone paid attention to the big home that Little Red Ant was building.", there's a fragment. I would change "but" (an intrasentence connector) for "However," (an extrasentence connector) in order to avoid it.
ReplyDeleteHi there! I'm not quite sure about this but as a suggestion, I'd omit or change by a synonym on the third paragraph the word "happy" in the phrase "... they were all so happy and grateful...". In order to avoid repetition because is already mentioned in the previous line. Apart from that, a great story!
ReplyDeleteI already said that I liked this story very much and I will be bothering you again with another comment with the "correction" part. In fact, it is just a suggestion. In this line: "So came Black Ant and asked Red why she was building such a big house." I think that there should be a clearer reference to the little red ant. Instead of just writing Red. It looks like theres might be something missing. Great story"
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