A new mess
It was a sunny day in the back garden. A little Red Ant
was happily walking through the green grass to her house. There, her parents
were waiting for her because they had good news.
Once at home, little Red Ant found something strange in
her room: a new small bed. Mummy Red Ant looked at her and said:
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“Do you like it?”
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“Yes ... but ... what’s for?” – said little
Red Ant surprised.
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“Well, a baby is coming home. You’ll
have a little brother to play with and we need to make some changes at home” –
Mummy explained.
Little Red Ant didn’t answer and stared at the little
bed. Mummy went out of the room and her daughter stayed there alone thinking
about the news.
A few hours later, after buying some presents, Mummy
noticed that the house was a mess. Little Red Ant had taken all her toys off
her room and were all around the house.
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“What’s this? – Mummy asked angrily.
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“What’s wrong with that? It makes room for new
people.” – little Red Ant replied.
And Mummy realised that that her daughter was working
really hard to make space in her room for her new brother.
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I`d replace the connector AND for WHILE in the sentence in line 10 -"Mummy went out of the room WHILE her daughter stayed there aline thinking about the news."
ReplyDeleteHi! I'm Sandra. Nice story! I agree with Cecilia, you should have written the connector "while" instead of "And" in line 10 or 11.
ReplyDeletesimple, funny and enjoyable story!!!! Great.
ReplyDeletethough, I'd finish the story in "little red ant replied".
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