It was a rainy summer day in Ituzaingo when a group of little Red Ants where forced to leave their home as theirs had been flooded by the storm.
As soon as the panic was gone, they got organized and decided to get into a house. But it was already occupied by a crowded family of cockroaches! "Let's besiege the house and push them away!", said the queen. But one of the oldest workers explained that it was a difficult task. So the queen proposed to have a word with the leader of the cockroaches. The meeting took place under the kitchen. No sooner the conversation was becoming spicy than one cockroach suggested sharing the place. Both ants and cockroaches bursted into rage. And then a soft tiny voice was heard. "What's wrong with that?", said little Red Ant. "It makes room for new people".
After a dead silence, the queen of the ants and the leader of the cockroaches made a route map of the house and decided which zone was for each group. Eventually, both leaders shook hands and they all lived together peacefully...at least, for the time being.
Written by Mariela Barletta, Andrés Lema, Marcelo Mediavilla y María Cecilia Morilla.
Ituzaingó is always flooded when it rains jaja. I'm glad that the ants and the cockroaches decided to share the place :)
ReplyDeleteGuys,your writing made me remenber an oral activity we did in Oral Expression I: The bungalow is flooded! Hahaha!
ReplyDeleteGuys,your writing made me remenber an oral activity we did in Oral Expression I: The bungalow is flooded! Hahaha!
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I like the part when both insects have a deal and share the house peacefully.
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I like the part when both insects have a deal and share the house peacefully.
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I like the part when both insects have a deal and share the house peacefully.
ReplyDeletePeople, I like your story! In my opinion, your writing has a good introduction, clear development, a conflict and a peaceful and original resolution. Congrats!
ReplyDeletePeople, I like your story! In my opinion, your writing has a good introduction, clear development, a conflict and a peaceful and original resolution. Congrats!
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ReplyDeleteTitle: I'd write "Truce" (capital letter for the 1st letter since it is a short story.
( line 1) not "where" but "were". It was just spelling!
(line 2) I'd change "theirs" for "it" (reference). (I might be wrong, but doesn't that "theirs"sound redundant?)
(line 8) I'm not completely sure, but I think that the correct expression is "burst into a rage". So, in "bursted into rage" I believe there's something missing. Nevertheless, "rage" can be countable or uncountable. What do you think guys??? Please, do not say "It depends on the context" !!! Bloody ambiguity!!
Hi! I'm Sandra. It is really a nice story! you should be careful with spelling mistakes, (in line 1) you have written "where" instead of "were" and (in line 2) I think the anaphoric reference is "it" instead of "theirs".
ReplyDelete"Repetition" and "Parallelism"
DeleteHi partners, I really Like your story,mostly the creativity you use to include the sentences we had to.
ReplyDeleteTo make a.suggestion I could saythat it would be better if you add more descriptions about the.place the ants are getting in and about the ones that already live there.
This would attract the reader attention and would Create suspense.
Thanks. .bye.
Nayla
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